Paper 3, Question 1 - Andrew M.
Throughout time, not only the English language, but many languages have changed and evolved. This text is a very good example of the change throughout the years. At face value, older text might seem identical to something that would be written in modern day English literature, but there are a lot of discerning factors that play into the variation between this text and modern English.
First of all, the structure in text A is very unique from the currently used English structure. The sentence structure is very long and descriptive. For example, “You will, I am sure, my dear nephew, take it in good part, if I point out a few of the conversational faults, of which young men are apt to be guilty.” A noticeable characteristic of the sentence is the overuse of commas that turn the sentence into a run on sentence. Another thing that these commas accomplish is breaking up the speaking pattern. While modern day English speakers may break up their speech while speaking, the majority of writing from modern day does not contain visual breaks when the reader reads it. Another structure difference is that the sentences found in text A are very long, which does not line up with newer sentence structure. For example, many of the sentences are at least 30 words long or even longer in some cases. A big reason for this expanding of sentence length is the use of the aforementioned punctuation like commas found in many sentences throughout text A and semicolons that are found in the last paragraph.
Another apparent example of language evolution is the actual linguistic use. For example, in the first paragraph of Text A, the author uses the phrase “apt to be”. According to text C, this phrase is similar to the phrases “are likely to be” and “tend to be”. According to the chart in text C it is apparent that “apt to be” has been decommissioned and the new phrases that have been previously listed have taken over as the main way to articulate this phrase in modern day. Another example of language that is being used in text A that is out of date is the author’s use of the word “coxcomb”. Most individuals will most likely have never heard this word but the definition of it is “a vain and conceited man; a dandy.”. Basically this means that anyone that is a “coxcomb” is an over confident person. In the 1800’s this word was used very commonly but overtime, it has become almost non-existent in the modern era of the English language. Another word that this text contains that is not commonly used nowadays is the word “anecdote”. It means a real short story about something or someone. While students are still taught about the word and have to write anecdotes in class, the word isn’t commonly used in everyday life.
A big reason that the English language has changed drastically from 1832 (the year text A was written) to 2022 is the world events that were going on at the time. A big reason why older texts contain poorly written sentence structures (at least in modern vision) is because of the education system. Many kids were raised on farms, plantations, and other places so education was never put first. Also, money was a problem for a lot of families so they could never send their children to school to learn how to write properly. If a kid managed to get to school, they were usually put in a one room schoolhouse and placed with other children that differed in grades from kindergarten to high school. This blend of students was unbeneficial to the learning process of children because of the lack of one-on-one time between teacher and student.
Overall, the English language has changed a lot while the world around it has also changed unequivocally. This parallel development of literature and societal norms has undoubtedly changed the course of the English language maturation for generations to come.
Hey Drew,
ReplyDeleteI think the first thing that I noticed about your paper was the lack of buzzwords. Sometimes you would define a buzzword and wouldn't actually use the word itself. This was first seen in your second paragraph when you said "A noticeable characteristic of the sentence is the overuse of commas that turn the sentence into a run on sentence." This is a great opportunity for you to include the syntactical structure of the text. You more focus on the grammatical side of the switches which will still bag you some good points with Cambridge, but I would suggest a shift towards syntactical structure analysis. This is evident throughout the paper so unfortunately without much inclusion of theoretic or buzzwords it represents a limited understanding of, but generally appropriate reference to, linguistic issues, concepts, methods and/or approaches. AO4 2/5
When it came to the level expression you showed I believe you had clear expression, with occasional errors which do not impede communication. Your content is relevant and the ideas are developed clearly. With minor errors that were far and few in between you held your end. What held you back from higher markings is you're understanding of change in the first text. You had organization of ideas, even though, some did drag on or were too short. Like your point you had including English change based on world events. I get where you were coming from, but to apply that logic to the evidence included was sort of a stretch. So your AO2 was 3/5
As for the final section of marking, AO5, I believe that you could have vastly improved upon. You didn't include Text B at all... This is obviously a deductive from your score since it was inclusive of the prompt. For what you did observe and compare between the sources I think was done well, but there is still room for improvement. Fortunately, the improvements will be simple with a little bit of brushing up on the theories that will tie the texts together. You did have a clear and appropriate selection of language data from at least two sources, and clear analysis and synthesis of the data. So for this I am giving you a 7/15 on AO5
Overall 12/25
I'd give this an 18/25. When going through the checklist, I broke down each section in to five points each. I gave a 1-5 rating on each text then add them together. Firstly, you showed your understanding of the development of the English language through presenting your own outside knowledge of the English language. Secondly, you showed understanding of lexis and graphology. Thirdly, you referred to 2/3 sources. Overall, it flowed well and you covered most of the requirements for the assignment, for that I'm giving an 18/25.
ReplyDeleteIf only 2 of the 3 sources were referenced, there is no way that this essay would score close to the score you applied.
DeleteDear Andrew,
ReplyDeleteFor AO2 I give you 3 marks. The reason that I give you this grade is because You're told and you had a clear expression. The content was relevant and your ideas developed clearly, you got across to the reader without any communication impediments. The thing I would change in this is how effective it was to the reader, you did give a good background knowledge. However, you need to work on answering the prompt, you really didn't go into depth about the language. Example of when you go off track was towards the end of your blog. For instance this whole sentence “If a kid managed to get to school, they were usually put in a one room schoolhouse and placed with other children that differed in grades from kindergarten to high school. ” you didn't need to put that in there. The reader can tell that you are trying but you didn't meet the prompt but you were just pulling things out of mid air that aren't making sense.
For AO4 I give you one mark. The reason that I give you one bark is that you didn't use any theories whatsoever when understanding the text. You are attempting to understand the text but you really we're just pulling things out of the air and hoping it would work. You didn't quote from all three of the texts, you only quoted from the first one and the last one. And you didn't use any of the buzzwords or anything on the spreadsheet that Scalia sent out the night before that this was due. Understanding the linguistic choices and methods within the texts were basic and of the billable references to linguistics methods or approaches. You tried telling the reader about the background but that's not what they asked. What I mean is that you talked about how education was important and how that affected the sentence structure. You only mentioned ‘apt to be’ in one of the paragraphs that you wrote. And then you continue to say how it drastically changed but the n-gram shows that it actually hasn't overtime. So basically your analysis was completely in the opposite direction.
For AO5 I give you 2 marks. You did not analyze all three of the texts. So, that's the reason why I'm giving you two marks because you had a Minimal data and evidence. The basic and minimal section of language data and you didn't have one theory in your whole analysis. And you really didn't answer the prompt. The reason I say that is because you didn't use the resources that the text gave you. You really talked about the background of it, then you didn't know what you were talking about because it showed that language between the 1800 and 2000 haven't really changed that much. For example “A big reason that the English language has changed drastically from 1832 (the year text A was written) to 2022 is the world events that were going on at the time.” But Is it correct, I'm not saying this based on my personal knowledge of it I'm saying it based on the data that the texts gave you.
I give you 6 marks out of 25.
Hello Andrew,
ReplyDeleteI really liked your blog and thought that it was very good. You have shown a wide variety of understanding of the changes of language throughout time. I think you have done a very good job of doing this by giving your examples. I had really liked your point on why the education system had many different kids knowing different types of english. I think that you could have used text b a little bit in order to drive in and back up your points a little stronger. I also think that you could have used a few theories in order to also strengthen your points. For example you could have mentioned the infectious disease theory when you were talking about the kids knowing different forms of english from their varying lifestyles. I had really liked the language you had used throughout the text as there were multiple buzzwords. Overall i would give you 14 marks for this. Great job!